IELTS Task 2: Two-part question continued…The first two essays sent to me at ieltsnsw@gmail.com will get a free correction and commentary published on ieltsnsw.com

Today’s example of a two-part essay is slightly more complicated than the previous one.

Here is the question again:

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In the sample essay provided, I have chosen to say it is both positive and negative. You should only do this if you have confidence in your ability to keep these conflicting ideas in a coherent paragraph.

IMPORTANT NOTE: For the purposes of the IELTS test, it doesn’t matter what your actual opinion is – choose the opinion that enables you to write a clear, coherent essay. Remember, the examiner does not know you and cannot know what your actual opinion is.  For example, if you believe that fathers staying home to look after the children is a negative thing but can’t think why, then see if you can come up with arguments for the positive. You are being marked on you English writing proficiency, not your opinions.

Sample Essay

It is a growing trend these days that more men are staying home to look after their children while women are the breadwinners of the family. This essay will discuss the reasons why this is happening and why, in my opinion, this is mostly a positive development, despite some drawbacks.

There are two main factors which have led to the phenomenon of men staying home to look after the children. The main one, obviously, is economic. These days women are able to earn the same amount of money as men, in general terms. This means that in a heterosexual partnership, a couple may choose whichever of them earns the highest salary to be the main wage earner. It makes common sense that if a woman is earning several thousand dollars per year more than her husband, the family will be better off if she stays at work. Another factor is that social attitudes are shifting. This allows for more flexibility in gender roles, which were once too rigid to support the option of men staying in the home to look after the children.

On the whole, in my opinion, the current trend is a very positive development. Firstly it allows men to develop a stronger bond with their children. Time and work constraints in the past have often meant that men simply did not have the time or energy to get to know their children well, or to develop a very close relationship with them. The other clear advantage of men staying home to look after the children is that women are then free to pursue a career as well as have children. This is allows women to broaden their horizons and experience a much wider world then the previous domestic world which was assigned to them. The only downside to be considered is that working women perhaps may come to feel that they are not spending enough time with their children and children may miss that close bond with their mothers as well.

In conclusion, I believe that the trend of fathers staying home to take care of the children is a positive development because it helps to create freer and more flexible lives for men and women and also allows a closer bond between fathers and children than they had in the past. Perhaps in the future more couples will work part time, so that both parents and children have more balance in their lives and no one feels like they are missing out.

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